Of course there are other mediums for communicating online, but the written word is by far and away the most important. I've focused on advice for social media, but a lot of this stuff holds true for all kinds of copywriting, from title tags to proposals.
Here are five points that I came up with that I hope will help you when you write for the web and, in particular, social media.
1. Headline Act
In Obama's victory speech, he 'teaches' his audience what to want to hear next, both with his language and with the syntax of his speech. We learn to expect what's coming, and to feel rewarded when it happens. For example, as David Crystal expertly explains on DC Blog, Obama opened his speech with an 'if' clause:
“If there is anyone out there who still doubts that America...”When we hear an 'if' clause, we know it has to be resolved at some point. Obama daringly drew out the sentence, holding off on the punchline for a record breaking 41 words. By keeping his audience with him (using a few tricks you can read more about on DC Blog), the satisfaction felt on completion of the clause is significant.
By rewarding your audience in this way you're getting them on your side.
Online, headlines operate in much the same way:
- They get people to listen/click through. Like Obama's 'if' clause, write a headline that is not resolved there and then.
- They set the audience up for what they're going to hear/read. Write a headline that 'teaches' your audience what to expect. For example, "The 5 Geekiest Sci-Fi Movies at Sundance 2009".
2. Conversation: "Oh yes we can! Oh no you can't!"
For me, the beauty of Obama's slogan 'Yes, we can' is the implication that someone, somewhere has just said, 'no, you can't'. A conversation is in progress. The natural reaction is to want to be a part of it.
This is particularly true online. There are countless ways to communicate and the most successful (forums, blogs, social media sites) are those that invite conversation. It's the equivalent of turning up first at a party and having to awkwardly chat with the nervous host for 10 minutes, instead of arriving half an hour later when there is a lively discussion about who would play a Mac and a PC in a movie already in progress. Getting a conversation into your content can be done in a number of ways, depending what kind you're after:
- say something controversial in the headline or early in the content
- get a friend to say something controversial in the comments
- make a fairly obvious mistake; someone will correct you.
3. Content Is President (oh, come on)
Obama's speeches are well researched and often include numerous references to well known themes or specifics. USA Today has helpfully listed a few of these that appeared in his inauguration speech:
"his [Obama's] reference to 'our better history' was reminiscent of Lincoln's reference to 'our better angels' in his first inaugural address. Obama mentioned 'the full measure of happiness;' Lincoln in the Gettysburg Address talked about 'the last full measure of devotion.'"It's not hard to make the leap to how this translates online; you know the rules and so do I. In-jokes nearly always work because they make your audience feel clever and very much part of the 'gang'. As with most things though, go overboard and you run the risk of looking stupid.
4. Inclusive Language: "What's in it for me?"
David Meerman Scott has done a wonderful analysis of the language in Obama's inaugural speech, looking at the internal (me, I, my) and inclusive (our, we, us) language and comparing the ratios to Bush's first inaugural speech. The results are predictable and demonstrate one of the reasons why Obama is a better speech maker: he answers the all-important question, "What's in it for me?"
By including his audience so completely (he also avoids any gender specific language), Obama is having a direct conversation about a shared past, present or future. Ok, so your blog post about title tags might not be quite so life-changing, but if you make it obvious that it's essential to our industry, you're halfway there.
5. Know Thine Audience
The political crowd is one of the most difficult out there. They are hardwired to mistrust you and have a hundred different reasons why you or your policies have personally ruined their life. They'll string you along until it suits them and then drop you like the out-of-date/manipulative/lying/philandering stone that you are. Sound familiar? The online crowd is a very similar beast. Savvy. They're fickle, smart and don't like to be manipulated or patronised. Obama masterfully accommodates for the traits of his audience, and you should do the same. As Crystal again exemplifies, Obama's victory speech was filled with rhetorical tricks. These fitted the occasion perfectly as the crowd was enthused with victory and more than willing to play along. It's a bit like going to a pantomime; you know the deal and you're in the mood.
Obama's inauguration speech, however, was different. Gone was the clever, heady rhetoric that built to a mob-like climax and sought to pull or push the willing audience in a certain direction. In its place was thoughtful, steady speech filled with actionable bullet points:
“We will build... We will restore... We will harness... We will transform...”There's some really interesting stuff about this around the 'net. You want to start with the difference between hypotaxis (climactic argument) and parataxis (bullet points) and go from there.
Your content should offer the same. Although rhetoric lies at the very heart of persuasion, don't be tempted to manipulate your crowd unless you're in the right place to do so. Instead, offer them useful points they can easily access at any point in the future. Your audience isn't stupid and making the mistake of treating them like they are will inevitably lead to disaster.
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I really enjoyed researching and writing this post and would love to hear any tips or tricks you've picked up from unusual places.
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Great post.
"In-jokes nearly always work because they make your audience feel clever and very much part of the 'gang'."
I'd never have thought that political speeches had 'in-jokes', but when you have thousands of people playing call-and-reponse with 'Yes we can' then you've definitely created a sense of being part of the gang.
This is amongst the best reasons to know and engage with a community, so that when you want to rise up the ranks, you can appeal to what they are familiar with.
Really nicely written and thought provoking. I think the attention to detail is often neglected online but it can make a huge difference to people's reactions. Writing something that is well crafted and targeted to a specific audience has much better chance of success.
Fascinating post. Plenty to take away there and refer to later! Especially enjoyed it as I studied language (like speeches) in English Language A Level and thought your use of language in this post was demonstrating how it's done very well!
It'd be great to read more about copywriting for the web. Sure SEO is about keyword density and creating good anchor text, but what about the quality of the copy surrounding all that? Does it actually do the job it was originally intended to do - sell?
Thanks Lucy, looking forward to reading more of your posts.
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Great post. It's truly interesting to understand everything that goes into a speech, especially one given by "the most powerful man in the world". A single phrase or word could turn the speach in an entirely different direction.
Even more interesting is the fact that we have thousands of blog writers on the web and if they employ these tactics the readership may increase for many of them.
This really gets me thinking about how I write on my blog. I am not the best writer, but this really draws out some good points!
Big hug for using Obama as an SEO metaphor. The message (content) is more important than the medium (digital).
First things first this post was EXCELLENT and true.
From a comment above I agree Obama ran the best presidential Marketing campaign EVER and spent the most EVER! It's border line propaganda (I say propaganda because he like all politicians will not do all the things he has promised us..but I hope he does)
As a Registered Independent who voted for him I am really sick and tired hearing about his Michelle Obama's wardrobe and their puppy in the news. Obama mania needs to stop and they need to get to work ASAP because things have only gotten worse since election day, not obamas fault but the media's now.
1. Bin Ladin Still hates the US
2. Iran is now burning pictures of Obama rather than Bush
3. Japan passed 8 "bailouts or stimulus packages" back in the 90's. Have we talked about the Yen since that crash??. We've passed 3 which have only delayed the inevitable, another one will not help unless its directly for the PEOPLE.
4. Obama's innaguaration speech echoes EXACTLY what Bush has been saying the past 2 years..SEE for yourself on the Daily show, hardly a change so far.
5. Thank a Veteran each and every chance you get because they are the reason why we have not been attacked since 9-11 and luckily we are STILL a voluntary military.
I am an Independent who feels duped EVERY time I vote but will never stop voting!
Although I agree that Obama is a good speechwriter and knows how to deliver the right 'call to action' so to speak, I think it's also worth looking at how he's changing the semantic playing field of traditional politics.
You may want to look here for an analysis of what I mean by that.
President Obama's use of inclusionary language is a part of what I see as his brilliant understanding of relationship marketing.
I had the opportunity to spend the last two weekends before the election in Florida, helping friends with the campaign. Instead of a big media blitz to his target demographic, we spent all day knocking on doors and talking to voters, person-to-person. It was amazing to see how responsive voters were to the relationship approach to campaigning.
As someone who believes relationship marketing is a major success key in 2009, I'm keeping a close eye on the various ways the President continues to reach out in an inclusive fashion.
Mr Obama is Great man . His speech is always powerful for us.
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There's also an intangible quality to Obama that is not easily explained by theory. It's more than the words of his speech that make them so believable. It's the delivery as well. It's the whole package.
I like your analysis. Very thoughtful, insightful and human. Thank you for demonstrating the power of authentic voice. It is one thing to try to trick people, it is another to take the time to find out what they are truly asking for, and help to deliver it so they can focus on what is to be done.
Creating a good style is critical to effectiveness. I would love to have you contributing on a community new social media site UnitingCreatives.com that is just coming out in beta...it is designed to help us change the future, by focussing enterprising people on the good news and collaborative efforts of so many people. Thank you for the post. This is my first time on your site. Very nice to read a useful post. Joy
Hi Joy, thanks and welcome to the SEOmoz blog!
Excellent first post Lucy, there are some fascinating tactics in here. Did Obama write that speech?
Thanks Rich.
Do you mean the inauguration speech? My understanding is that it was a joint effort between him and Favreau. He's definitely written his own speeches before though.
Slightly off topic, I find Barack Obama's use of social media throughout his campaign quite fascinating. A google search on Barrack Obama (for me in the UK at least) results in firstly his donation/contribution page followed by: wikipedia, Facebook, YouTube vids, MySpace, Twitter...Flickr on page 2.
Indeed a google search for 'twitter' results in Barack Obama's twitter profile appearing 2nd.
Condemning without offending is another Obama trait that Internet community can replicate...
Fantastic article. Obama is a terrific writter himself and is one of the best in modern politics. I know we are still a long ways from this point, but I can not wait to read his writtings of time spent in the White House.
Colin
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Great post. I tried to write up some of my thoughts of why I thought Obama was such a great marketer. It's not about his speech, but rather what we can learn as marketers from his overall campaign.
Check it out, if you'd like.
He really did pin the whole branding thing along with his speaches.
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